星期五, 三月 5

什么样的个人陈述更能吸引澳洲高校招生官

  众所周知,个人陈述是申请澳洲留学重要的材料之一,那么怎样写更能吸引到招生官呢?接下来和乐曦教育小编一起来看看什么样的个人陈述更能吸引澳洲高校招生官?

  首先来看看个人陈述的基本写作内容。

  教育背景:你的大学专业是什么?你为何选择这个专业?通过多年来的专业学习,你学到了什么?与你选择的专业有什么关系?

  工作经历:你曾经担任过什么样的职务?这几年来的工作中有什么业绩、学到了什么?

  社会活动组织能力:在大学期间曾经参与或组织过什么活动?曾担任什么样的职务,从中又学到了什么?

  最满意的一次经历:最满意的一项工作或科研学习经历是什么?是怎样做好它的?

  最突出的才能:你认为自己最突出的方面是什么?如领导能力、组织能力、交流沟通能力或是协调能力。

  学习计划和目的:学习期间的学习计划是什么?与你的职业追求、职业目标又有什么关联?

  奖励:你曾经受过何种奖励?你是否担任过助教?你是否有优秀的论文曾经得到发表或受到奖励?

  特长爱好:你的特长与爱好是什么?

  接着给大家讲解一下在书写过程中需注意的事项。

  1、突出个性化

  在个人陈述的开头,可以用你一个独特的故事开始你的个人陈述,以充分的个人情感表达对这个课程项目的独特兴趣。

  2、表现独特性

  描述你的重要经历,既可以是你兴趣发展的历史经历,也可以是增强你申请该课程决心的特殊经历,还可以是对你的人生产生深刻影响的经历。

  3、表明可行性

  你对学校、课程、研究领域、教授的了解将有助于为入学部工作人员留下深刻影响。你在解释为什么你与申请课程相匹配时,这方面的内容将加强可行性的说明(注:这方面的信息可以从网络、学校资料等方面获得)。

  4、委婉地表达

  你必须在个人陈述中诚恳地表达你的观点和想法,但是必须策略地描述你的优势和不足,即以积极、肯定的观点表达你能够满足入学要求,委婉地表达你会改进不足。特别是你的不足与入学要求相冲突时,这一点显得尤为重要。

  5、澳洲留学申请清晰陈述目标

  你必须在个人陈述中表明你所申请的课程将有助于你达到你的预定目标。注意在写作中灵活地使用短期目标和长期目标之间的辩证关系。

  最后给大家带来一篇参考范文。

  Pick up any newspaper today and you can find many headlines related to stories about economic problems and trends. I am always deeply absorbed in the economic news, especially in the analysis and description of the capital markets.

  I was born in XX City, a large city with lots of heavy industry companies. My father is an engineer in a shipbuilding institute and my mother is a technician in an electronic apparatus factory. Since I was very young, they began to teach me plenty of knowledge of natural science and hoped me to become an engineer like them one day. But they changed their mind when they find me interested in the field of economics, an absolutely different area they were not familiar with. They agreed to send me to XXX Finance and Economic University which has been ranked in the top ten in my country by commerce economics.

  In the year of 2000, I entered the faculty of Investing Economy of that university and started my four-year strict education. In the first two years, I laid more emphasis on the basic theories, such as models in economics and investing. Later in my 3rd and 4th semesters, I found that lacking of practice became a bottle neck of further studying. Fortunately, my graduated thesis tutor, Professor XXX and Teacher XXX provided me some good opportunities to practice in the Company of Nahu Real Estate and Sanxia Securities Company, in which I lived a substantial and pleasing time. Besides my major, computer science is my anther interest. In the last year of my university, I was certified with MCSE(Microsoft Certified System Engineer) and got a part time teaching job in Richinfo Teaching Center, which largely increased my communication abilities. When I finished my graduated thesis, I got the Bachelor s Degree of Economics successfully in July 2000.

  On the day of 28 September 2004, I began my career in the accounting and funding department of Beijing XXX Company and was assigned the duty of investing. My company usually got irregular cash flows so lots of money was left unused. At first I followed my workmate, Mr. XX, a senior staff in my department and put only a little fund in the securities market. The initial success was a great encouragement to me and I began to invest more. 2002 was a golden year for me though the whole market was not good. In that year I admit 90,000 shares of the stock–Sea Oil Project and 50,000 shares of stock-Da Sha in thier Initial Public Offering and sell them in the same year. That brought us 1,100,000¥ profits before taxation and my work results was highly confirmed by the general manager and other colleagues. The luck continued to the first half year of 2003 until the stagnancy of the whole stock market in July. Now I am directly led by the general manager and do some management and marketing work as well.

  The four years of working matured me rapidly not only in technique skills but also in abilities of communication and cooperation with colleagues and other person. With the opening policy of China s Capital Market, I realize internationalization is a trend I must make good preparations for. So I determined to go abroad to go on further learning about financial knowledge and improved my English skills and the course of master of finance will be my best choice..

  Socialising is very important to me, and I am always keen to meet new people. I enjoy trying new culture and new foods. My good culinary skills will prove very useful to the daily life of my future foreign studying. I enjoy traveling and learning about modern history. Music is one of my biggest hobbies, and I use music to help me unwind and reflect on things. I use the internet to keep up with current affairs and sports news.

  I have always been a keen sportsman, representing my school of basketball competition many times and now I often play it in the evening. I also enjoy playing tennis and table tennis, as well as football.

  I believe that I have made sufficient preparations for a new university life. My skills together with my ambition to succeed prove me to be good candidate for your master degree..

  Applicant: XXXX